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Sunday, 25 July 2010

Pocket Watch

I found my old pocket watch today,
Rediscovered its timeless charm.
My love decided to go away,
Gone with a spectral hand on my arm.

I can wind up this watch anytime,
Control its hands as I will, and
The same is true of you – cross the line.
You tell me nothing with your hand.

I clutch its shining gold lustre,
Things such as these never desert.
Arguments we had; so much bluster,
In the end no meaning, just hurt.

Here I am among my possessions,
Lamenting the truths that cannot
Be denied. Will we learn the lesson?
That love and lovers can be too hot.

I can wind this watch for all my days,
Acquiring goods to fill the space,
Distracting me from thinking up ways
To win you back, to kiss your face.
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9 comments:

  1. Hi again, just dropping in for a nosey. I liked this, felt the emotion in it quite a lot. Makes it a good poem (or a morbid reader?!)

    Keep going, I'm impressed with the quality of your poems and your regular postings. Thanks for inspiring me to finish something else soon!

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  2. Hi Mavis, I wrote this on the calm of a damp Welsh mountain last weekend. It's not for me to say whether a poem is good or bad but I know when I'm satisfied that one has formed well and it's very rare that I can take a look at a poem half a day later and not make any changes - but this one met both those criteria.

    Thanks for your continued support and I'm glad I could give you a little inspiration!

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  3. I love the concept of this poem...I love the comparison here between the pocket watch with it's timeless charm, and lost love. It has such wonderful imagery. I can see why it is one of your favourites! Beautiful writing! :-)

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  4. I enjoyed reading this poem and experiencing the emotion you share. I particularly liked the line "Will we learn the lesson?
    That love and lovers can be too hot." as It is a truth denied for many. Thank you for sharing.

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  5. vivid word play,
    I see what you do,
    cool !

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  6. A great message in this piece...things will never replace love..bkm

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  7. I loved the emotions and story within your words and all bounded by time.

    Eileen

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  8. Thank you all for your kind comments! I'm very grateful and glad you liked it.

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  9. enjoy your watch
    and smile all the way.

    Happy V Day.

    A++

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